Day 14 (Part 2) of the Pitch Wars Query & 1st Page Workshop with mentors Derek Chivers & Susan Bishop Crispell
May26

Day 14 (Part 2) of the Pitch Wars Query & 1st Page Workshop with mentors Derek Chivers & Susan Bishop Crispell

Welcome to our Query and 1st Page Workshop with some of our amazing Pitch Wars mentors. From a Rafflecopter lottery drawing, we selected writers to participate in our query and first page workshops. Each mentor has graciously critiqued a query or 500 word opening from our lucky winners. We’ll be posting four critiques per day (except weekends) through July 7. Our hope is that these samples will help shine up your query and first page and that you’ll get to know some of our wonderful Pitch Wars mentors. We appreciate our mentors for giving up their time to do the critiques. If you have something encouraging to add, feel free to comment below. Please keep all comments tasteful. We will delete any inappropriate or hurtful ones. First up we have … Pitch Wars mentor Derek Chivers . . . Website | Twitter Derek Chivers was born and raised on Alaska’s Kenai Peninsula. He spent his childhood running wild through woods where winter winds drifted snow deeper than he was tall, and the midnight sun stretched stories and summer days long past reasonable limits. Now he shares life’s adventures with his wife and daughters. He can still run wild in woods nestled between snow-capped peaks, or just lose himself between the covers of his favorite authors’ novels. He is a founding member of Anchorage writing collective The Life Partners (thelifepartners.tumblr.com), and an infrequent contributor to their short fiction Tumblr. His short fiction was published in the 2009 and 2011 editions of Understory at the University of Alaska, Anchorage, where he wrote opinion for The Northern Light newspaper and received a BA in English Literature. His creative nonfiction “Gunshots on Dogfish” placed first in a 2011 statewide writing competition and was published in F Magazine. He is represented by Becky LeJeune of Bond Literary Agency. Derek’s Query  Critique . . . AGE CATEGORY: Adult GENRE: Urban Fantasy Dear Agent As a nymph, Zephyra has had more than her fair share of unwanted attention, though no one has ever done anything quite as dramatic as leaving a pile of slaughtered animals in her favorite hunting spot. [This is a great hook, though I would play with word choice and see if you can whittle the same thought closer to 25 words or less for more impact.] All signs [evidence, or just human prejudice and suspicion? I ask because the distinction could paint a very different picture.] point towards the newly arrived [To the town? World?] wolf shifters as the culprits, and tensions escalate between the human citizens of Paros [city, nation, world?] and the aberrations they live alongside. [just shifters, or all fae?]...

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THE STRANGE AND DEADLY PORTRAITS OF BRYONY GRAY by E. Latimer . . . Cover Reveal and ARC Giveaway!
May26

THE STRANGE AND DEADLY PORTRAITS OF BRYONY GRAY by E. Latimer . . . Cover Reveal and ARC Giveaway!

  Title: The Strange and Deadly Portraits of Bryony Gray Author: E. Latimer Release Date: February 13th 2018 Publisher: Tundra Books (February 13, 2018) Age Range: 10 and up Grade Level: 5 and up About The Strange and Deadly Portraits of Bryony Gray . . . Lemony Snicket meets Oscar Wilde meets Edgar Allan Poe in this exciting and scary middle-grade novel inspired by The Picture of Dorian Gray — a family curse is unleased! Bryony Gray is becoming famous as a painter in London art circles. But life isn’t so grand. Her uncle keeps her locked in the attic, forcing her to paint for his rich clients . . . and now her paintings are taking on a life of their own, and customers are going missing under mysterious circumstances. When her newest painting escapes the canvas and rampages through the streets of London, Bryony digs into her family history, discovering some rather scandalous secrets her uncle has been keeping, including a deadly curse she’s inherited from her missing father. It turns out, Bryony has accidentally unleashed the Gray family curse, and it’s spreading fast. With a little help from the strange-but-beautiful girl next door and her paranoid brother, Bryony sets out to break the curse, dodging bloodthirsty paintings, angry mobs and her wicked uncle along the way. PRE-ORDER HERE: Indigo | Amazon | Kobo | Barnes and Noble | Goodreads   ARC Giveaway . . . Winner of the advanced reader copy of The Strange and Deadly Portraits of Bryony Gray will be selected from people who RETWEET the post and TAG E. Latimer.   Some questions for E. Latimer . . . What was your inspiration for writing The Strange and Deadly Portraits of Bryony Gray? I have a very real love of all things 19th century London, and I already knew my middle grade voice is very much suited to that time period. I was grasping about for ideas of what to write next. I keep on my desk, a beautifully bound copy of the complete works of Oscar Wilde, and in that book was the story of Dorian Gray, which sparked my line of thinking: What if Dorian secretly had a daughter? What if the curse hadn’t quite been broken in the end? Soon after that, Bryony Gray was born. How did you get into writing? I’ve been writing terrible stories for as long as I can remember. Since the moment I could hold a pencil properly, I imagine. Luckily, they’ve become less terrible over the years. At least, I think they have. Were you inspired by other authors when you wrote Strange and Deadly Portraits? There’s a rather wonderful description my publishers have put on the...

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Day 14 (Part 1) of the Pitch Wars 1st page Workshop with mentor, Emma Wicker
May26

Day 14 (Part 1) of the Pitch Wars 1st page Workshop with mentor, Emma Wicker

Welcome to our Query and 1st Page Workshop with some of our amazing Pitch Wars mentors. From a Rafflecopter lottery drawing, we selected writers to participate in our query and first page workshops. Each mentor has graciously critiqued a query or 500 word opening from our lucky winners. We’ll be posting four critiques per day (except weekends) through July 7. Our hope is that these samples will help shine up your query and first page and that you’ll get to know some of our wonderful Pitch Wars mentors. We appreciate our mentors for giving up their time to do the critiques. If you have something encouraging to add, feel free to comment below. Please keep all comments tasteful. We will delete any inappropriate or hurtful ones. Next up we have … Pitch Wars Mentor Emma Wicker … Emma is the author of award-winning Fractured Immortal, and Finding Immortal. Her new contemporary romance These Simple Scars has just been released. Her obsession is New Adult, and Adult Contemporary Romance. When Emma is not writing or looking after her busy household, she’s either reading, gaming or stalking her favourite authors as well as studying for her Masters in Psychology. www.facebook.com/emmawickerauthor www.twitter.com/Emma_Wicker www.elwicker.com Emma’s recent release … These Simple Scars Emma Wicker Publication date: May 8th 2017 Genres: Adult, Contemporary, Romance Sometimes, the worst scars are the ones that can’t be seen. After fleeing her abusive father, Faith’s goal is to find a job and earn enough to finally be able to live in safety. When she ends up stranded in the sleepy town of Silver, Georgia, it’s not long before she meets sexy mechanic Garrett. His willingness to help her one minute then dismiss her the next, leave Faith confused by this guarded and irresistible man. Although Garrett has left the military, the war returned home with him. An attraction to the new girl in town takes him by surprise, but if he’s to keep his scars hidden, Faith is no-go. His heart tells him to trust, but his mind is determined to get the better of him. As the pair deal with their wounds, tragedy threatens to rip them apart. Supported by new friends, Garrett and Faith wrestle with their pasts and an unexpected love they fear won’t last. Goodreads / Amazon Emma’s First Page Critique . . . AGE CATEGORY: Adult GENRE: Literary Fiction It is four-thirty in the morning, not yet day, but warming, [morning so close to warming is distracting due to the rhyme, I would advise altering one of the two, however an excellent start reminiscent of the genre] the sky still mostly opaque, but a...

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Day 14 (Part 1) of the Pitch Wars Query Workshop with mentors, Heather Van Fleet & Jessica Calla
May26

Day 14 (Part 1) of the Pitch Wars Query Workshop with mentors, Heather Van Fleet & Jessica Calla

Welcome to our Query and 1st Page Workshop with some of our amazing Pitch Wars mentors. From a Rafflecopter lottery drawing, we selected writers to participate in our query and first page workshops. Each mentor has graciously critiqued a query or 500 word opening from our lucky winners. We’ll be posting four critiques per day (except weekends) through July 7. Our hope is that these samples will help shine up your query and first page and that you’ll get to know some of our wonderful Pitch Wars mentors. We appreciate our mentors for giving up their time to do the critiques. If you have something encouraging to add, feel free to comment below. Please keep all comments tasteful. We will delete any inappropriate or hurtful ones. First up we have … Pitch Wars Mentors Heather Van Fleet and Jessica Calla . . . Website | Twitter Heather Van Fleet is stay-at-home-mom turned book boyfriend connoisseur. She’s a wife to her high school sweetheart and a mom to three little girls, along with her crazy Goldendoodle. In her spare time, you will always be able to find her with her head buried in her Kindle, guzzling down copious amounts of coffee. Heather graduated from Black Hawk College in 2003 with an associate degree. She has been working in the publishing industry for over five years as author, editor, and agent intern. She’s represented by Stacey Donaghy of Donaghy Literary.  Heather’s recent release … Amazon | Barnes & Noble | Add to Goodreads “Sweet, funny, romantic and oh so very sexy! Prepare to swoon mightily.” –SAWYER BENNETT, New York Times and USA Today bestselling author of the Cold Fury Hockey series COLLIN MONTGOMERY Between boot camp and two TOD’s in Iraq, my buddies Max, Gavin and me have been through some serious hell. So the last thing I ever expected was to find the biggest challenge of my life back home. My girlfriend died. I couldn’t even attend her funeral, let alone tell her goodbye or that I’m sorry I wasn’t there like I should’ve been. But she left me a gift. The best and scariest one I could’ve ever asked for. One I didn’t think I could handle…until the day I saw her tiny blues looking up at me in that airport. Chloe. Now here I am, raising my baby girl-with the help of my two best friends. Things couldn’t be better. Until she walked into my life. All I wanted was a nanny. Someone to take care of my girl when I couldn’t. What I didn’t count on was Addison, the brown-eyed temptress with a body of sin, and everything...

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