PW #348: Young Adult Fantasy: FOUR DEAD QUEENS

Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor: Mara Rutherford and Joan He
Mentee: Astrid Scholte
Title: FOUR DEAD QUEENS
Category: Young Adult
Genre: Fantasy
Word Count: 87,000

Pitch:

Ruthless thief Keralie becomes entangled in deadly politics after witnessing the murders of her world’s four queens, captured on disk. The information could be rewarded with lifesaving medicine for the boy she loves, but escaping the palace alive will be her greatest heist yet. RED QUEEN meets SIX OF CROWS.

Excerpt:

The morning sun caught the palace’s golden dome, flooding the Concord with light. While everyone halted their business and glanced up—as though it were a sign from the four queens themselves—we perched overhead like vultures, ready to swoop in and pick them apart.

“That one,” Mackiel said after studying the street below from the café’s rooftop. He jerked his chin toward a woman in a burgundy dress.

I snorted at the dirty footprints on the cobblestones behind her. All I’d find in an Archian’s pockets was grain and lint. “Don’t patronize me. Who’s my real target?”

The air here was thick with the stench of musty water. Beyond the central square were connections across the marsh to Quadara’s four regions. Mackiel scratched at his collar with beringed fingers, a nervous habit. But I was his best dipper, slipping in and out of pockets with a feather-light touch. I’d never let him down.

“Him,” he said finally, his brown eyes landing on the back of a dark-clad figure.

The target was clearly Eonist. While we Torians were rugged up in layers to ward off the biting chill, he wore a tight-fitting black dermasuit, an Eonist fabric made of millions of microorganisms that maintained body temperature with their secretions. Gross, but handy.

“A messenger?” I flashed Mackiel a hard look. “You sure?”

He flicked a charm on my silver dipper bracelet. “Yes, luv. You’re ready.”

“His comm disk?”

He nodded. “And remember—”

“Get in quick. Get out quicker.”

Author: Nikki Roberti

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  1. Ooh, yes please! I’d love to take a look at the full manuscript. Please send it to cmcdonald@maassagency.com, along with the query letter and synopsis, and include “Pitch Wars” in the subject line. Thanks!

    Caitlin McDonald
    Donald Maass Literary Agency

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  2. I’d love to take a look at the full manuscript. Please send it as a word attachment to querycaitie (at) lizadawson (dot) com with your query in the email, with the PitchWars request in the subject.

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  3. I’d love to read more of this! Please send your first 50 pages as a Word document to querylindsay@emeraldcityliterary.com. Include Pitch Wars in the subject line along with your query in the body of your email.

    Thanks!

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  4. I’d love to see this. Please send the query in the body of the email and the full as a doc to mallory(at)triadaus.com. Thank you!!!

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  5. Would love to see the full! Can you please send the full ms, along with the query + 10 pages pasted in the body of the email to flahertyqueries@thebentagency.com, with subject line: PITCH WARS + Title.
    Thank you! 🙂

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  6. I’m intrigued! I’d love to keep reading. Please send the full manuscript attached as a Word document to queries@parkliterary.com with “Pitch Wars – Pete Knapp” in the subject. Looking forward to reading! – Pete Knapp

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  7. This is a fabulous start! Please can you send your query + first 3 chapters my way to consider, at joan at emliterary.com? Thanks!

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  8. I’d love to read ore of this! Please send me the full as an attached word doc, to Querymandy@emeraldcityliterary.com. (Lindsay and I both requested this, and that’s okay– we’ll chat about it internally.) Thanks! -M

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  9. Yes please! Could I see the full, please, as a PDF, sent to lana@chalbergussman along with the query and “Pitch Wars” in the subject line? Thanks so much!

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  10. Great opening! I’d love to see the full manuscript. Please send it to melissa@rpcontent.com as a Word doc or PDF with your query in the body of the email, and be sure to put “Pitch Wars” in the subject line.

    Thanks!

    Melissa Nasson
    Rubin Pfeffer Content

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  11. I’d love to read! Please feel free to send the query + full manuscript (as a word doc) to taylorsubmit@waxmanleavell.com w/PitchWars in the subject line. Thank you!

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  12. I’m completely intrigued–I love this opening and your concept! I’d love to see the full manuscript. Please send it + query + synopsis to LBiagi (at) jvnla (dot) com, with Pitch Wars in the subject line. Excited to read!

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  13. I’d love take a look at the full manuscript! Please feel free to send it along as a word document to andrea [at] harveyklinger.com with “PitchWars Requested Manuscript” in the subject line. Thanks! I’m looking forward to reading.
    best,
    Andrea Somberg
    Harvey Klinger Inc.

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  14. Hi Astrid! I’m absolutely loving this. Can you please send the full and your query to penelope.gsliterary@gmail.com with “Pitch Wars” in the subject line? Thanks so much!
    Penelope

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  15. Hi Astrid–This sounds great, and I’m looking for a heist book! Please send the manuscript and a synopsis as Word doc attachments to queryroseanne@gmail.com with Pitch Wars and Query + title in the subject line. Can’t wait to read!

    Roseanne Wells
    The Jennifer De Chiara Literary Agency

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  16. I’m intrigued!! Please feel free to send the first 30 pages along with query, synopsis and chapter summaries to nicole [at] goldenwheatliterary [dot] com.

    Thanks!

    Nicole

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