PW #335: Young Adult LGBT Dark Fantasy: DEVIL’S CARAVAN

Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor: Jessie Devine
Mentee: J.K. Smejkal
Title: DEVIL’S CARAVAN
Category: Young Adult
Genre: LGBT Dark Fantasy
Word Count: 88,000

Pitch:

When Celia escapes the service of a false deity named Diavala, she must use her forbidden ability to ink magical tattoos to protect the roving theater troupe she calls family or watch Diavala destroy them. GRISHA at the MOULIN ROUGE.

Excerpt:

Another question mark bloomed on Celia’s forearm, bigger and bolder than the others. The ink unfurled in an oily black, stretched-out tentacle, wrist to elbow, the dot on the bottom a furious splatter. An hour ago she’d still been trying to cover Anya’s messages by tugging her shirtsleeve down until the marks had faded. An hour ago she’d still cared that she was in a packed shisha lounge surrounded by people who might ask their own questions.

But lovely absinthe made cares like that disappear even quicker than her friend’s angry writing on her skin.

Celia pressed her finger to the angry splotch on the bottom. I’d tell you where I am, she thought, if only I knew. Huzzah, absinthe!

She sat alone at a table, surrounded by clusters of pretty people doing flirty things: chatting and sighing, enjoying their drinks and smoke, unwinding after a busy day of whatever normal people did. Vibrant fabrics hung in plump folds from the ceiling, matching the cushions around low tables. Everything fluttered: colorful sleeves, loose pants, long hair, light from a hundred candles, jingly jewelry hanging from ears and wrists and necks.

Celia didn’t belong there, judging by the lounge owner’s fluency in scowls. With her black everything — short hair, suspenders, tie, top hat — she stuck out like a monochrome stain amid all the color and life. Not bothering to right her awkward sprawl, she smiled as he approached. Or maybe it wasn’t a smile, but a frown. Whichever way was up. Whichever way was down.

Author: Nikki Roberti

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  1. I’d love to take a look at the full manuscript. Please send it as a word attachment to querycaitie (at) lizadawson (dot) com with your query in the email, with the PitchWars request in the subject.

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  2. I’d love to take another look at this! Please send the full manuscript to querylindsay@emeraldcityliterary.com. Include Pitch Wars in the subject of your email and paste your query in the body.

    Looking forward to reading! Thanks.

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  3. Magic tattoos?! This sounds fascinating. Please send the full manuscript (as well as a synopsis if you have one) to lauren@triadaus.com with “Pitch Wars: [YOUR TITLE]” as the subject line. Please also include your query in the body of the email. I look forward to reading!

    -Lauren Spieller, TriadaUS

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  4. I’d love to take a look at the full manuscript! Please send your query pasted in the email and the full manuscript attached in a word document to: rena (at) thedeborahharrisagency (dot) com

    Thanks!

    – Rena Rossner
    The Deborah Harris Agency

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  5. This is a great concept, and your writing is so good! I’d love to see the full manuscript. Please send it + query + synopsis to LBiagi (at) jvnla (dot) com, with Pitch Wars in the subject line. Excited to read!

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  6. I love tattoos, and I love magic, and I am DYING to read this. Could I see the full ms, please, as a PDF, sent to lana@chalbergsussman.com with a synopsis and “Pitch Wars” in the subject line? Really looking forward to reading!

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  7. I’d love to read! Please feel free to send the query + full manuscript (as a word doc) to taylorsubmit@waxmanleavell.com w/PitchWars in the subject line. Thank you!

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  8. I love this premise! Please send the full manuscript as a Word doc or PDF with your query in the body of the email to melissa@rpcontent.com, and be sure to include “Pitch Wars” in the subject line.

    Thanks!

    Melissa Nasson
    Rubin Pfeffer Content

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  9. Hi J.K.–Great comp titles and opening pages, and I love a girl with suspenders and a top hat! Please send the manuscript and a synopsis as Word doc attachments to queryroseanne@gmail.com with Pitch Wars and Query + title in the subject line. Can’t wait to read!

    Roseanne Wells
    The Jennifer De Chiara Literary Agency

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