PW #120: Adult Commercial Fiction: LIES UNDERCOVER

Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor: Tamara Mataya
Mentee: KK Hendin
Category/Genre: Adult Commercial Fiction
Word Count: 97,000

Pitch: Miss Congeniality meets 21 Jump Street

Serious field operative to fake Youtube beauty Vlogger? Not the CIA career trajectory Kira anticipated. When a lethal drug circulates the NYC modeling community, Kira’s thrust into a world of models, mayhem, drug lords, and douchelord exes. Solving the case while deciding between kissing or kicking Blue Sandoval-Mendoza? It’s complicated. Now, if she can just find a Met Gala dress that’ll hide all her knives…


March 2015

When I joined the CIA, I knew they’d ask me to do a lot of weird shit, but this is possibly the weirdest. Has Jane Hesterman, head of the CIA, lost her goddamn mind? She wouldn’t destroy our careers like this.

Son of a castrated monkey. “You want us to do what?”

“Exactly what I said.” Hesterman gives me the stink eye. “We need infiltration in the entertainment industry. You fit the part.”

“Isn’t starting a YouTube channel counterintuitive? Why bother with covers if we’re going to be so exposed?” Calli asks. “Beauty vloggers-turned-bodyguards? You’ve got to admit, ma’am, it’s…farfetched.”

Hesterman’s grip tightens on her cup. “This isn’t just about protection. It’s about infiltration. The celebrities in these circles don’t let their guards down unless they think you’re one of them.”

But we’re not one of them. “How are we going to—”

“Sterling will be working with you on this project.” Hesterman turns back to her computer, effectively dismissing us. And with that, the meeting that kind of just changed the entire trajectory of our careers is over.

We hustle out of the conference room and head towards Starbucks. There are a lot of uncomplimentary things you can say about the CIA campus, but having a Starbucks here is really nice.

Not to mention the baristas have never fucked up my order.


Author: Heather Cashman

With a Bachelor’s degree in Biochemistry, the lab reports always lacked the fantastical element Heather's imagination demands. Hypotheses turned into taglines and novels, so she's going back to college for a Creative Writing degree. Her novels range from Epic Fantasy to Contemporary Speculative Fiction, she dabbles in picture books, and is currently seeking representation. ~Member SCBWI

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  1. I’d love to take a look at this full manuscript! Please send the query pasted in the email and the manuscript attached in word to rena (at) thedeborahharrisagency (dot) com


    – Rena Rossner

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  2. Hi! I’d love to take a look at the full manuscript! Please send it as a word attachment to querycaitie (at) liza (dot) com with your query in the email, with PitchWars request in the subject.


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    • In my excitement, I didn’t finish the email address! querycaitie (at) lizadawson (dot) com

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  3. I’d love to take a look– please email the first 50 pp as a .doc to, with your title and PitchWars in the subject. Thank you!

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  4. This sounds like fun! I’d love to read the first 100 pages of this if you would please send as a Word attachment. You can email me directly at carrie(at)prospectagency(dot)com. If you would put PITCH WARS in the subject and the query in the body of the email that would be great. Excited to read more!!

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  5. I AM OBSESSED WITH THE CIA STARBUCKS. Please send this to me!! I’d love to see the full as a Word doc attachment with “Pitch Wars” in the subject line, to query [at] handspunlit [dot] com.

    Thanks, and I look forward to reading!

    Courtney Miller-Callihan, Handspun Literary Agency

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