Pitchwars Badge (Square YA)Manuscript Status: 2 week delivery

Mentor Name: Jeanmarie Anaya
Mentee Name: Jessica Fonseca
Category: YA
Genre: Contemporary
Word Count: 82,000


Texting her boyfriend’s best friend Lucas is okay. Sexting him late at night, not so much. As seventeen-year-old Allie’s family life crumbles, she can’t imagine surviving without her perfect-on-paper boyfriend, River. But as the texts keep heating up her heart, a force like Lucas isn’t easy to ignore.




8:35 pm
LUCAS: U ready 4 me?

ALLIE: Depends what U mean by ready

LUCAS: U know what I mean…;)

ALLIE: Not sure I’ll ever B

LUCAS: Well, ready or not, here I come.
Should B 1 hell of a ride…

Chapter 1

It’s amazing what my friends can talk me into.

I hate carnivals. They creep me out with their blaring noises and insane lights. Throw in the screaming kids with whiny voices, and the herd of bodies slamming into you with every step, and to me it doesn’t equal fun. It equals hell.

But I’m still here.

I walk through the crowd of people, clutching River’s hand, hoping to God he doesn’t let go. I don’t want to get swallowed alive by the chaos of eight-year-olds circling us.

Beside me, Toni asks, “So, where’s this Lucas guy at anyway?”

The moment I hear his name, my stomach shoots into my chest. I still can’t believe this is happening. I still can’t believe he’s here. River smiles at me and brushes my hair behind my shoulder. My stomach sails higher into my throat and I pull his arms around me in an attempt to calm myself.

“How about you go look for him and River and I will go back to his Jeep,” I say and nuzzle into River’s chest. He chuckles from somewhere deep inside himself. It vibrates through me. The panic I felt moments ago eases and I grow warmer from the inside out.


Author: Brenda Drake

New York Times bestselling author of Thief of Lies (Library Jumpers #1), Guardian of Secrets (Library Jumpers #2), Touching Fate (Fated Series #1), and Cursing Fate (Fated Series #2) available now, creator of #PitchWars, #PitchMadness, and #PitMad, fueled by coffee and Goldfish crackers (but not together), and represented by Peter Knapp with The Park Literary Group. @brendadrake

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  1. Wow, this one sounds intense! I would love to see more. Please send a query and the first 100 pages as a Word doc attachment to, and make sure to put “Pitch Wars Request” in the subject line of the email. Thanks – I’m looking forward to reading on!

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  2. I’d like to see more! Please send a query + the full MS to leon@lperkinsagency (with Pitch Wars in the subject line), along with a one-sentence description of your book.Comment

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  3. Hi, Jessica- I’d like to see where this is going! Please email the first 100 pages to as a Word doc, and be sure to put Pitch Wars in the subject line. Thanks!

    Melissa Nasson, Esq.
    Associate Agent
    Rubin Pfeffer Content, LLC

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  4. I’d love to read more! Please send the first 25 pages, query and synopsis to chquery[at]mcintoshandotis[dot]com and put “Pitch Wars request” in the subject line.

    Christa Heschke
    McIntosh & Otis, Inc.

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