PW #104: MG Mystery: THE LOST TREASURE OF FULL MOON LAKE

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Manuscript Status: Finished

Mentor Name: Jenna Lehne
Mentee Name: Wendy Parris
Title: THE LOST TREASURE OF FULL MOON LAKE
Category: Middle Grade
Genre: Mystery
Word Count: 45,000

Pitch:

Desperate to save her grandparents’ failing Wisconsin lake resort from demolition, twelve-year-old Mia begs a Ouija board for help. A ghost named Gus responds, claiming knowledge of long-lost cash hidden onsite. Thrilled, Mia follows his sketchy clues, until she discovers Gus was a Chicago bank robber who disappeared in 1932—and his ghost is after her big brother. Clock ticking, Mia must find the loot to bail out the resort before her brother sleeps with the fishes and her family’s legacy disappears forever.

Excerpt: 

For Mia Molloy, summer never officially began until she dove into Full Moon Lake.

Luckily, her grandparents understood this. The second their beat-up Jeep stopped next to the Tamarack Landing lodge, Mia opened the passenger door and hit the ground running. She peeled down to her bathing suit, flinging her T-shirt and shorts on the grass as she raced toward the edge of the bluff, joy bubbling in her chest.

Behind her a screen door creaked and a voice whooped, “Finally!”

Mia grinned, picturing her best bud Connor McGee bursting out of the ranch house next door, but she couldn’t wait for him. She kept going, skittering down the stone steps to the beach, tearing across the warm sand, pounding along the aluminum dock. Reaching the end, she launched herself into the air, sailing free for one glorious split-second and then—whoosh!—plunged headfirst into the icy Wisconsin water.

A muffled roar filled Mia’s ears as she shot downward, her thick black hair streaming away from her face. The second her fingertips struck the reeds she reversed course, legs scissoring, arms sweeping, until she broke through the lake’s surface and inhaled a gulp of fresh, piney air.

Summer had started.

 

Author: Nikki Roberti

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13 Comments

  1. The excerpt here has me charmed by Mia right from the start! I would love to see more of this. Please send a query and the first 100 pages as a Word doc attachment to patricia@marsallyonliteraryagency.com, and make sure to put “Pitch Wars Request” in the subject line of the email. Thanks – I’m looking forward to reading on!

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  2. I absolutely love this! Please send the first 100 pages as a Word doc attachment to carrie@prospectagency.com, with the subject line “Pitch Wars Request.” Thank you and I look forward to reading more!

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  3. As a born-and-bred Chicagoan, I have to see more! Please send the manuscript and a query letter (MS Word preferred, PDF okay) to carlie at ckwebber.com with the subject PITCH WARS REQUEST: Title of work.

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  4. Definitely want to see this. Please send a query + the full MS to leon@lperkinsagency, along with a one-sentence description of your book.

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  5. Hi Wendy

    This looks great and I’d love to see more. Could you send me a detailed synopsis (500-700 words would be wonderful) together with the full MS as a Word doc to claire at rhaliterary dot com?

    Good luck!
    Claire

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  6. This is too much fun, I have to know more about Gus! May I see the full ms as a PDF, sent to lana@chalbergsussman.com, with Pitch Wars and the title in the subject line, and the query in the email body, please?

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  7. I’d like to read more! Please send the full manuscript in Word format and a query letter to submissions@janklow.com, and include “Stefanie Lieberman” in the subject line of the email. Thanks!

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  8. Love this! Please send the query + full manuscript to query@newleafliterary.com with the subject line, PITCH WARS – JAIDA. Looking forward to reading. (And yay Wisconsin!)

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  9. I love this and definitely want to see more. Please send the query + synopsis + First 50 pages (I know the question always asked — you can go to the end of a chapter, but no more than 60 pages!) in one word doc to MFsubmissions[at]bookendsliterary.com with “PitchWars Request – Mystery of the Lost Treasure of Full Moon Lake” as the subject. I can’t wait to take a look!

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  10. Hi, Wendy- I’d love to see more of this! Please send the first 100 pages to melissa@rpcontent.com as a Word doc, and be sure to put Pitch Wars in the subject line. Thanks!

    Melissa Nasson, Esq.
    Associate Agent
    Rubin Pfeffer Content, LLC
    http://www.rpcontent.com

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