Day Thirteen of July’s First Page Workshop with Pitch Wars Mentors …  Kara Leigh Miller & Max Wirestone

Day Thirteen of July’s First Page Workshop with Pitch Wars Mentors … Kara Leigh Miller & Max Wirestone

Welcome to July’s First Page Workshop with some of our past and present PitchWars mentors. From a Rafflecopter lottery drawing, we selected many wonderful writers to participate in the workshop. Each mentor has graciously critiqued a first page for one lucky writer. The writers are anonymous. Follow along all month to view the first page critiques. We welcome comments and further suggestions, but please keep them kind and respectful. Here are the next two mentors and their critiques … Kara Leigh Miller Website | Twitter | Facebook Kara lives in Upstate New York with her husband, three kids, three dogs, and three cats. When she’s not busy writing romance novels that leave readers swooning, she’s spending time with her family or attending one of her many writers groups. An active member of The Romance Writers of America and the CNY Writers Haven, Kara is also Managing Editor for Anaiah Press’ Surge and Romance Imprints. She absolutely loves to hear from her fans and fellow authors, so feel free to drop her a line anytime! About Kara’s Book… He’s fighting to forget his past while she struggles to remember hers… Doctor Josh Parker lives with guilt about his wife’s death every day. He believes himself incapable of ever loving again, but when a mysterious woman arrives in the Emergency Room, brutally beaten and left for dead, he starts to feel something he hasn’t felt in far too long: hope. Alessandra Matthews has no memory of the events that led to her being hospitalized. Worse, she has no idea who hurt her or why. Although she’s uncertain of who she is, she is fully aware of one thing—she’s falling for her doctor. Sometimes, what you don’t know can kill you… As Josh and Alessa work to solve the mystery surrounding her past, she soon realizes just how much danger she’s really in, but Josh refuses to let her face the darkness of her memories alone. With each of them struggling to put their pasts behind them, theirs is a DANGEROUS LOVE. ADD TO GOODREADS AMAZON B&N ANAIAH PRESS Kara’s first page critique … Smoke and sulfur billow up my nose from the frothy mess and stink of demon death. (Dig deeper here. HOW does it smell? Let your readers experience it, too.) The torrential downpour I’d created, by blowing up my spaceship in the atmosphere, (Aw, why don’t we get to see this?) dissolves the army of demons sent by Hell to kill me. This is a fantastically dark opening! 🙂 It certainly makes me want to keep reading, which is good. I spread my arms, and tilt my face to Jupiter, the gas giant forever looming...

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